Wednesday, 18 June 2014

my writing- baby carrier

This piece of writing shows.....
 That I am able to use clauses and connectives in my writing.
I believe I am at ....
relational because I know where to put clauses correctly but I still need to seek feedback.
my next step is to seek feedback to become extended abstract.

Here is one paragraph of my writing :

Baby carrier

In the last example, there is a company selling fake, as well as, defective baby carriers. The clip easily comes apart, and if a baby was in the carrier, it could be badly hurt. As a result of this the real company could be effected because people might think the real ones are fake too.

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