writing prove it- sentence structure

My goal was sentence structure. I wrote a speech about lying. My point was that lying is ok. I learnt where to put conjunctions.


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The truth is dangerous. It's deadly. How would you like it if someone told you that you smelt bad? Or that your favourite outfit makes you look fat? The truth hurts, doesn't it. Although people may seem fine, they often hide how upset they really are. This can lead to self harm or worse while, friendships are often affected by the truth.

My next step is to get a new writing goal.